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Washing Life by Kori| Written 8/1/17

Love is scattered around,
still feeling raw to collect the pieces.

Sitting on the curved edge,
the force to live is fading.

Emotions tattered,
a friend chimes in showing disdain.

He skirted the truths thrown at him,
and refuses to take responsibility.

He drew the short straw,
but failed to come clean.


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2 thoughts on “[197/365]

  1. Digging this. A couple thouhhts:

    1. What are your thoughts behind using italics here? What are you trying to emphasize?

    2. Life gets a lot better. I’ve been right where you’re at–maybe a little too much. Keep chuggin’.

    3. I like this image of living on a curved edge. I mean–it’s that exactly what we’re all doing? Isn’t that the experience of 7 billion people living on the Earth’s surface? There’s something really brilliant in that line: we’re all here, physically and psychologically. We’re all skirting the line. We’re all just existing.

    Thanks for the read!

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    • Hey there! Thanks for the kind words ๐Ÿ™‚

      1. The words used were from the Sunday Whirl prompt. Basically you get a set of random words and have to use them in your writing.

      2. I’m not depressed or anything lol even if my poem seems depressing. It’s about a guy I was in a relationship with who was sort of unhappy in his life yet lied constantly.

      3. I’m glad you enjoyed that line, it was a bit more morbid than that. The guy who I am talking about stated that he contemplated suicide a few times.

      Again, thank you for the kind words ๐Ÿ™‚ I am glad you enjoyed this!

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