Poetry

7th Grade Thoughts – [85/365]

Young Me by Kori | Written 3/29/17

Past.

Old internet.

Remember?

Before Facebook?

When machines didn’t rule and our hearts were pure?


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7 thoughts on “7th Grade Thoughts – [85/365]

  1. Past. ……………………………………………………………………… ✓ 1 syllable
    Old internet. ……………………………………………………………. x 4 syllables, should be 2
    Remember?……………………………………………………………. ✓ 3 syllables
    Before Facebook? ………………………………………………….. ✓ 4 syllables
    When machines didn’t rule and our hearts were pure?…. x 12 syllables, should be 10

    A compromise plus a reversed addition

    Past. ……………………………………………………………………… 1 ✓
    Old web. ………………………………………………………………… 2 ✓
    Remember?……………………………………………………………. 3 ✓
    Before Facebook? …………………………………………………… 4 ✓
    Pure hearts, when machines did not rule some lives! …. 10 ✓
    Now Twitter, Instagram, LinkedIn too! ……………………….. 10
    Controlling all. …………………………………………………………. 4
    Abuse used! …………………………………………………………… 3
    Now so ………………………………………………………………….. 2
    Sad………………………………………………………………………… 1

    Absolutely, categorically, no disrespect intended.
    For a first attempt, well done, mind you not a topic it I would of chosen. My only suggestion is to stick to the letter of the format, it can be difficult, and I suppose that sometimes that will be down the chosen subject. Hope to see/read another one. Leaving you with a link to a syllable counter just in case, keep at it,

    Mick

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